Tuesday 20 September 2016

Beautiful Nightmare

I was in a plane on my way to Indonesia. Suddenly the door of the plane opened and I fell out. I fell through branches. Someone started running to me, chasing me. I ran to. I was running faster and faster. Why were they chasing me? Soon I found myself tripping over a rock. But I think I lost them. I didn't know where i was.  I looked up. What I saw in front of me was extraordinary! I heard a sound. Then suddenly I woke up. It was all a dream! No wonder it seemed so unrealistic!


 


 
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  1. Mrs S21 September 2016 at 08:48

    Hello Karmen,

    I enjoyed this piece of writing, but I would like to have heard more about this magical place, even though it was just a dream. You focused more on the events before you arrived at this place, than on the place itself.

    Also, take care to write the word 'I' with a capital letter (I think that might have been a typo) and take note of the spelling of 'too' i.e. I ran too.

    Keep up the good work, Karmen. I look forward to your next piece!

    Mrs S.

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